word game: pain

[museaway]

This week's word is...
PAIN

How to play: Find the word in any WIP and comment with the sentence containing it. Just the one, ideally! The less context, the more hilarious & interesting it can be.

Rules:
- All fandoms, all ships, all writers welcome
- Give a head's up for disturbing/distressing content
- If you share a sentence, please read some left by other writers and drop at least one person a comment. (If you leave the first comment, thanks for starting us off, and we hope you'll pop back around later!)

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Comments

excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaking

[theemeraldgirl23]

Here's a different one from the one I shared in discord this time!

CW: physical assualt

The man slapped her. “Fuck you! Truly!” He pulled her by the collar of her work shirt and bashed his forehead into hers. “A real dancer would never quit! No matter what!” He pushed her to the ground. “They would keep going right until they keeled over on stage!” He pulled her back up again, forcefully enough that her prosthetic came loose.

Kazuha groaned in pain. “Damn it! Stop! I’m telling you the truth!”

Suddenly, someone came and pushed the man away. “Run! I’ve got this!”

Kazuha tightened her prosthetic and jogged away, silently thanking the person who saved her.

Re: excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaki

[linky]

Oh this is so tense and evocative!! You can really feel the urgency in this, wonderful work!

Re: excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaki

[theemeraldgirl23]

Thank you! I was trying to capture a tense moment, since Kazuha is caught off-guard. She's cornered by this man who claims to be a former fan of hers as she's going home from work. She tries to talk some sense into him, since she's not the type to resort to violence, but this guy wasn't having it.

Re: excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaki

[belovedstill]

That's so messed up of that guy 😭 I'm so sorry to Kazuha. It's such a relief that somebody came and saved her. I hope 👀 they will meet again 👀

I am very curious what the truth Kazuha said was. Was it about somebody else quitting?

(Well done on writing a very believable asshole c':)

Re: excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaki

[theemeraldgirl23]

The truth of the statement is that Kazuha lost her leg. The guy is just being a complete asshole. Here's the lines before the excerpt in the same exchange:

The man pulled her back again. “No! I’m not accepting that! Tell me why! Tell me why you quit ballet!” he spat.

Kazuha curled her hand into a fist. “I don’t owe you anything! Get out of my face!”

“You quit without a word! You owe everyone an explanation! Especially your fans!”

“What do you want me to do?! Film a video taking off my leg for the world to see? God, I’m so tired of this. My situation is my own! Not anyone else’s! Especially not yours! Back off!” Kazuha sighed, releasing her fist. “Let me ask you something. If you were really my fan, would you be harassing me about something I chose not to reveal? If you were really my fan, would you be yelling at me for something that was out of my control? It wasn’t like I wanted to quit.”

And about them meeting again, I did have a plan for it. The person who saved her was the fiancee of one of her friends. The friend invited her to their wedding and they'll meet there, but it's pretty far along in the events of the fic. I'm not even close to being there, lol.

Re: excerpt from Welcome to Le Cafe Chapter 2: Lesson 1: How To Ace An Interview Without Even Speaki

[belovedstill]

Oh... Oh no, somehow the guy is even worse c': Thank you for explaining and showing me the earlier excerpt.

Best of luck getting the characters to the wedding!